Aiko Shimizu

[Guest]

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CASE FILE: Alchemist

Water is the catalyst of life...
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FULL NAME:
→ Aiko Shimizu

AGE:
→ 24

SEX:
→ Female

BIRTH PLACE:
→ Kyoto, Aerugo

RACE:
→ Aerugese

DATE OF BIRTH:
→ May 12th, 1988

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HEIGHT:
→ Five feet, six inches

WEIGHT:
→ 134 lbs

PICTURE:
→

Spoiler:

DESCRIPTION:
Aiko's hair color is blonde, and is past waist length, and pretty much always straight. Her eye color is a light lavender, almost as if it was grey. She is fairly busty, but if she had a choice, she wouldn't be so. She usually wears a red dress which does show her bust. Her skin almost seems tan but is just between being pale and tan. She walks as if she were a high class person, and her voice is the same, but she is far from a high class person, but as well, she's not lower class. Some of her mannerisms are that she taps er middle finger and thumb together in tense situations. She also wears glasses half the time. Also, while she gets stressed, she will tap her fingers either somewhere on her or on a surface nearby. She has a transmutation circle etched into her right inner forearm.

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PERSONALITY:
Aiko is a fairly down to earth girl who has a slight breast envy with those who have smaller breasts than she does, which is one of the reasons she dislikes being so busty.She is polite, but can be somewhat rowdy at times if she gets too tired or irritated by someone. She is also someone who somewhat dislikes being touched by a random stranger with the exception of accidentally getting bumped into by accident and not getting groped. If she gets drunk, which is rarely, she basically becomes a high classed snob who treats almost everyone like a peasant or something as the such.

At times, her personality can be described as erratic. Her emotions can start and end with the snap of a finger. She is usually happy, and knuckle-headed. She also holds back any feelings of sadness as she thinks that they are a sign of weakness. Anger is one of her weaknesses, as she doesn't really have a hold on his. The one thing that Aiko usually cannot handle is when a woman/female person is crying near her, she will try to help them, but she would usually end up failing and making them run away from him, most likely as she's not great at reading women as she is with reading men.

She also acts the way she does, because as a child she wasn't known too well for keeping her anger in check. While she was young, she'd cry at anything that she'd find sad, which was anything that a normal adult would find sad, and she was also shy as a child. She finds that crying is a weakness just. Depending on who she met, if it was someone who was able to get close to her, the would be able to get her to reveal some emotions she wouldn't usually towards new people.

LOVE:
→ Smoking
→Training
→Hanging out with friends
→Eating
→Meeting the occasional new person


HATE:
→ Alcohol
→Womanizers
→Arrogance
→Stalling
→Heat

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HISTORY:
Aiko was born into a upper middle class family, on May 12th, 1988. As she grew up in the city of Kyoto, she was somewhat confused as a boy while she grew up, where as her fraternal twin sister, Aika, wasn't. During her childhood, Aiko stayed mostly around her sister, rarely leaving her side until one day her sister had gotten into an argument with another girl in which Aiko had stepped in and assaulted the child. Even though they were all young children, The child and her family had moved away and she was scolded harshly by her parents and even somewhat shunned by her sister, which caused her to lock herself in her room for a day or so before gathering some items and running away from home, though not going too far as she was only a young child. She still stayed within the city, just not too close to home and going to a different school. As she stayed hidden in the streets at night, sleeping in somewhat warm areas when she could and almost getting hypothermia several times as well. Though during the times she had been out in the open and having to beg for money from people to buy food and such and other times having to go and steal either food or some small item in which she could sell for money to buy the bare essentials, she had witnessed some back alley alchemy and alkehestry so to speak.

After seeing it several times, one day when she was in school, in which she would have turned twelve by now, she had asked some of her schoolmates if they knew what any of this was, and one of her teachers overheard her and answered her question, in which got her interested in Alchemy. Soon, she would start looking more into what alchemy was and what it could do after sneaking into a library and 'borrowing' some books for a while so she didn't have to do too much out in the open. She did miss her parents and sister, but she figured they would still be angry with her for the fight that happened several years ago and that they'd scold her again, this time more severely for running away from home for so long, so she stayed in this way of life for the rest of her time in school. For the next several years, she stayed in school with fairly good grades, and graduating at eighteen years old. After graduating, she would then return home to find two happy parents to see one of their children again, and her sister who seemed to be the exact opposite of her in pretty much every aspect, with the exception of hair color. After a couple months of getting back into being an actual family once more. Though being back with her sister, even in personality, her and her sister have become almost polar opposites, almost getting into arguments almost weekly.

Soon after reaching twenty years old, along with Aika, Aiko decided to start back up on her research into Alchemy and even attempting to try it every now and again for the next year, in which she would be more apt at it and eventually becoming an alchemist in the process, which was a happy time for her, but it was dashed as her sister came down with a terrible form of Tuberculosis, called Extensively Drug Resistant Tuberculosis, or XDR-TB for short, and after a battle with it for the next four months, she soon passed from the disease. Aiko's parents were virtually devastated with it, and Aiko herself had acted as if she was unaffected by it, eventually becoming callus to the news of people being sick and dying. So for the next three years, she would do her work and other things that she kept secret from her parents, with using her sisters name, which she would defend with her own honor, and blacklist anyone who spoke ill of her or the name.

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TRIVIA:
→ Languages: Aerugese

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ALIAS:
→ Aiko Shimizu

OTHER CHARACTERS:
→ Previously Nero, but one of the staff suggested to revise all my stuff, so I chose a new character as i thought it'd be better to do so.

FACE CLAIM:

Code:

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CUSTOM RANK:
→ Aquatic

OFFICIAL TITLE:
→ Lady Aqua

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[Csilla Angelis]

REVISE

Age/Date of Birth
-If her birth year is 1987, she would be 25 and not 24. Change the year or age. Whichever.

Birth Place
-Any town in particular that she was born in?

Description
-"She has a transmutation etched into her right inner forearm." A transmutation circle? Go ahead and toss that word in there.

Personality
-The personality is good, but you tend to switch between "he" and "she". If Aiko is female, then it should read as such across the board.

History
-"Aiko was born into a upper middle class family, on May 12th, 1984." Birth year does NOT correspond to up above. Make it match.
-Again, you keep flipping between "he" and "she." Sort it out.
-You kind of jumped right to her birth, to a blurb about her twin, to going straight into her teenage years. Why did Aiko go her separate ways? Did she leave her family? Did she act out due to family troubles? She would steal to survive, but was falsely accused of theft and sent to prison? Expand a little bit more on this. This first part of the history feels a little slap-dash.

Trivia
-Don't be afraid to add more! =D



All in all, it's a good app. I'd love to see you expand on the history some more. But take care of the changes I listed and then post when you're finished. Then I'll take another look.

[Guest]

Editted, hopefully it's all done.

[Reila Tsukino]

REVISE

You asked for me ;P

1. Birthplace: ENTER IN A JAPANESE CITY. How hard is that?
2. Description: "She has a transmutation etched into her right inner forearm." CIRCLE put in the world CIRCLE.
3. Personality: *drunk Please check your spelling/typos/grammar!
4. History: "Soon after the two had went their separate ways, she stayed and needed what she had to do to survive, which included, stealing, and fighting." ...Wut? Why did they go their separate ways? Why did they need to survive--what happened to their family/parents?
5. History: " By this time she was 16, and in prison." --She would be in juvenile detention not prison. They also don't put males and females together so unless she's getting raped somehow from other girls, it wouldn't happen.
6. History: *planted evidence
7. History: "she started getting curious about alchemy again." --When was she ever curious about alchemy?
8. History: *for an adequate
9. History: How did her twin sister die? Why didn't her parents take care of them? How would her parents know that her twin sister died if they weren't taking care of them?
10. History: "She had left them to try and make someone of herself even though her parents wanted Aiko and her sister to become what they wanted, not what they wanted to become, which they would have keep them under lock and key to prevent them from becoming what they had wanted, but otherwise, they were a fairly happy dysfunctional family." --This run-on sentence makes no sense. Their parents wanted something for them? Because it kind of sounded like they were abandoned and went their separate ways. That's beyond dysfunctional. That's non-existent.
11: History: OR WHAT?! And why is that there? It's just thrown in there. Put it where you were actually talking about her twin sister. And what is Aiko doing now? Where is she, where does she live? Set her up for MDA a bit.

All in all, this app is much better than your old one. I'm proud of you so fix those things and let's see you improve!

[Reila Tsukino]

APPROVED

How did she go to school if she ran away from home? Better though. Much better.

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