Vexx and Judith Marquès (DONE BRO/SIS)

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CASE FILE: Alchemist

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FULL NAME:
→ Vexx/Judith Marquès

AGE:
→ 24

SEX:
→ Female, contrary to extremely popular belief.

BIRTH PLACE:
→ Chernobyl on Record but born at sea.

RACE:
→ Drachman (SEEAAA URRCHIIINNN)

DATE OF BIRTH:
→ Twenty-eighth of July, twenty-four years ago.

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HEIGHT:
→ 198cm

WEIGHT:
→ 84kg

PICTURE:
→

Spoiler:

DESCRIPTION:
→ 'Their' refers to both Judith and Vexx. The reason he/his and/or her/hers are used o to set the mindframe of this young lady. She doesn't like men knowing shes female in truth. Vexx being his name and slightly different form during the day, whilst Judith is her form of body at night. At dusk and at dawn, both appearnce become one. The words her and him also signify at times which things are mor eimportant at night and during the day amongst other things. If you read slowly and try to understanf, you'll find that Vexx and Judith treasure mainly the same things. These atributes shall efect their personality and sightline of whats in front of thm in a manner of speaking. This appearnce may seem jumbled because of this but it in fact very on course and heading towards the end of the drag strip. So hang on to this Lambo while she shoots down the strip like a rocket. Or just buckle the seat belts.

Begin appearance.

Ah, the eyes of Vexx... they indeed entice the ladies with their cat-like yellow color but with human pupils. The glow these deep yellow eyes emit is like no other. They seem hyponotic in fact, to such an extend that when they change to their bright violet and seem like pools of swirling darkness that raises the temptation of the lords around Judith at times. Those who stare become lost in thought at times due to the sudden vicissitude in distinction to the glowing sun and king Vexx, taken away from its castle in the sky by an eclipsing moon queen Judith. These mutating eyes, which fuasha eclipses the goldenrod like the moon covers the sun during an eclipse, ostensibly shifting with the time of day and night. The cold midnight attends to the glimmering goldenrod, whilst the warmth of day rewards with the deep fuesha pools of swirling darkness. At dawn and at dusk, the eyes form cresent like eclipses to show the beauty of both the king and queen.

If you look ever so close, you'll take notice of how femine Vexx seems during the day. The smooth and unangle face that surround the deep timing eyes is laced like moonlight in the darkest of nights as Judith, mirrors itself upon Vexx. Their eyebrows are sleek and slim, a darker black showing a deep blue tint on every hair. The sleek and soft scin of Vexx's face having such grace when the sleeve of skin over the eyes winks at a male or female he or Judith seem interested in. The short overshadowing eyelashes that sweep away the hearts of those Vexx dares not to break with a gentle blink. Vexx's cheeks, soft like cushions of cotten when one touches them but beware Judith's face is her most prized area besides her chest. Vexx's chin, seeming sharp from afar is in reality smooth and ovaling, soft as a cloud.

If one can only look above this enchanting face for even an instant, a dark ocean awaits. The midnight waters of the sevens seas seem to flow and storm from Vexx's head. Each thread of this silk midnight ocean, waving in the air like a sail and mast pushing the ship forward through the darkening seas. Woven together in such harmony and love, one could possibly fall in love with Vexx's hair alone. The epitome of the sea is what many have called Vexx's long silk weaves, these weaves never loosing their brilliant loving texture.

But take note and procede, Judith's breasts are still there as Vexx. If you remove the black belted duster with silver buckles, composed of the finest leather and materials one could buy, the white dress shirt of smoothest silk yet not as smooth as her hair, a professionally tailored black dress vest with a red feminine ribbon and red threading around the edges, you'll find a wrap that is specifically designed to hold in young Vexx's/Judith's large breasts. Yet, even in his day forum, Vexx's breasts are prominent enough to be inappreciably obvious. Alas, night or day, this vixxen's body below the clothing is smooth and feminine. The clothing worn is but a large size with the purpose to insinuate more masculinity. The black leath pants embroided with silver stiching and lining, quire a few sizes big yet, serving their purpose.
At both times though, her voice is very much... feminine.

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PERSONALITY:
→ Vexx/Judith is a.. very strange individual. Judith appears to be one of the more mysterious, mature and rational members of the Military. Her Day Counterpart, Vexx on the other hand is very nonchalant but serious at times. She is gentle-looking, perceptive, composed, receptive, and often acts without explaining her actions, thus she can not get an impression of the current situation. Vexx on the other hand tends to think out a plan in moments then inform and play the plan with others or on his own. She is also decisive, persistent, witty, somewhat impulsive, and quite bold, apparently prefering to wear several revealing outfits, while Vexx wears dusters and clothing that is anything but revealing.

Judith is also very flirtatious and apparently enjoys teasing the male members of the military, often making suggestive comments about "showing a little more" of her already-impressive figure, while Vexx threatens to deck any male who asks her out in during the daylight. Vexx has also stated that she is "not a very good liar" and that this trait hold true for his Judith persona as well. She prefers to tell the truth than to lie. Judith seems to enjoy fighting a great deal and is excited at the prospect of a battle, to the extent that it unnerves some others around her, and she is disappointed when unable to fight. Vexx meanwhile prefers not to fight, and is more of the silent reading type. Speech from Vexx is a hard thing to come by. She uses a spear to fight, while her Day Form Vexx uses a leather gauntlet.
It is dully noted that Vexx/Judith's day form is much weaker in all ways then her night form.

LOVE:
→ Reading, Killing Time, Being Lazy, Dressing Up, Blowing shit up.
HATE:
→ Chocolate, Idiots, Con-Artists, Cowards, Hypocrites

DEEPEST SECRET:
→ Vexx is not really Drachman, she was in fact born at sea to parents unknown. But her history does not reflect this on record. She also does not look Drachman. He also fears black cats.

IDOL:
→ Daigoro Ito, cuz he's mah BUD.

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HISTORY:
→ Three paragraphs minimum of your character's background. Be sure to include how your character became a ALCHEMIST etc. Try to steer clear of extreme drama and trauma. It is WAY too popular and rarely played out well. Once in a while, I'll accept a well written tragedy, but most of the time... no. Characters don't need horrific histories in order to be interesting. Keep the child abuse, rape, family deaths, etc out of here. They get old fast. Must be at least 450 words.

The History she gives people to get them off her ass:

"Raped at 12. Beaten by her parents. Brother died. I'm all alone and loving it now go die twice."

Real history. (Minus her secrets)
Judith was born 24 years ago to her parents whom were explorers. Due to her upbringing, she never stays in one place for long and has passports to every country due to her travels. When our young bluenette was five, she learned not to lean over the rails on the ship since she fell into the water while her dad yelled "Swim faster!" Though he jumped in while saying it even though the boat had its anchor down. That day she learned how to swim and she's been a fish ever since.

About four years later they docked at a port in Western Drachma. Little Judith saw an Alchemist there and watched the soldier perform for the citizens with her mother. She asked the man after the show to teach her but he laughed and said to come back when she was older and he would. He even did a pinky swear for her and now he waits on her to grow up. He had told Judith to come back when she was eighteen and then he could teach her but until then gave her piece of paper to trace circles for transmutation with. Her parents while docked had visited a Military base to see a blueprint of a ship they were requested to build called the Tartarus.

Here they stayed in western Drachma for seven years in which Judith went to school during this time with Alchemy training from the man from before. She became skilled in basic transmutation to create small sculptures from metal and/or earth. Though her attention span was always limited, she eventually began to help her parents with the Tartarus. Her learning of Engineering and Physics granted by Miltary level teachers helped her immensely as the benefits for assisting in this ships creation funded her schooling.

Now Eighteen, Judith enlists as Vexx/Judith Marquès, born in Chernobyl, Drachma. Her paperwork is filed and waited permission to become an Alchemist. Due to being not truly born in Drachma, the process took longer than she would have liked. While not an Alchemist Soldier, she is a student and a person with ease of access to Amestris, Creta, Xing and Drachma because of her travels with her parents as a child. Her passport was newly assigned to say she was an Alchemist and she was given a pocketwatch to signify who she was, a traveling Alchemist. She left with her parents after saying goodbye to her teacher and thanking him for everything. Right then, right there, he dropped to one knee with a ring in hand and asked her to marry him. Judith literally fainted on the spot and they're departure was delayed due to this and that she said yes while fainting.

Twenty-four years old, piloting the Tartarus with her husband Kiru, they sail the seas and sail the lands. The Tartarus being a land and sea ship oddly enough. They've been together six years and both are happy. The Tombstone Alchemist and the Gravemarker Alchemist, know for using tombstone like alchemy and spires of earth and other crazy things.

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TRIVIA:
→ During the day, Vexx's eyes are yellow while at night they are a purplish red. Also she wears a wig during the day to hide her real hair. Also wears a wrap.

→ Amestrian, Drachman and Cretaian are in her vocabulary.

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ALIAS:
→ Vexx or Vexx Marquès

OTHER CHARACTERS:
→ Only this one.
CREATOR'S COMMENTS:
→ DAI'S MAH BUD!

FACE CLAIM:

Code:

[b]Tales Of Vesperia[/b]/[i]Judith[/i]

CUSTOM RANK:
→ Luna Gale

OFFICIAL TITLE:
→ Tombstone Alchemist

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Archive date is July 4th.

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And we're done here.

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No. No, we're not.

REVISE

1) Remove that ridiculous cry of 'sea urchin' from the race field. We can read.

2) How are her eyes like that if she's anything but a chimera? Remove it.

3) If your character doesn't know or know of Daigoro - as a character - IC, then you can't idolise him. Simple.

4) You need to make a transmutation application if she's an alchemist.

5) Judith Marques is an Esparian name. Not a Drachman name. And Vexx isn't really a name. More an alias. Should put that down somewhere.

6) If you're a military alchemist, you need to note it in the header.

7) Pocketwatch is only given to state alchemists, which you can't be until level 2. Cut that.

Personality needs to be 300 words. It's only 284.

9) You've neglected to delete the guidelines section of this app in the History field.

10) 'Twenty four years ago'... yeah, no. Year, please.

11) *Cretan. Also, the languages need to be coloured appropriately.

12) 'Land and sea ship'... uh yeah, no. Unless this is a hovercraft or an ATV or some kind... I don't think that's going to fly. Something of this nature is definitely going to need to be logged as custom equipment.

13) A note on grammar and spelling. Whilst it's still legible enough you've got a few mistakes in there which might be worth addressing. Run it through a spellcheck program or something. Microsoft Word's the most obvious if you run windows. Open-Office runs nicely. There's probably a few online you could use; hell, I know Firefox and Chrome have optional spellcheckers in the post fields. Don't ignore red squiggles.

14) The first Description paragraph is a little redundant. Just an advisory. You don't strictly need to change it.

15) 'She uses a spear to fight, while her Day Form Vexx uses a leather gauntlet.' <- Fighting style shouldn't be in Personality. Take it out, throw it in trivia, make a custom weaponry app later.

That's just about it. I'd suggest reading through the information threads. They're pretty helpful.

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