Mizumoko, Kenji

[Guest]

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CASE FILE: Alchemist/Yakuza {Shatei}

Things will never be the same...
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FULL NAME:
→ Kenji Mizumoko
AGE:
→ 23

SEX:
→ Male

BIRTH PLACE:
→ Kyoto,Aerugo

RACE:
→ Aerugese

DATE OF BIRTH:
→ 8/24/88

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HEIGHT:
→ 176 CM

WEIGHT:
→ 86.6 KG

PICTURE:
→

Spoiler:

DESCRIPTION:
→ Kenji looks like a cold-blooded killer, the average civilian could even tell that. He has primarily white hair with black tips, which adds to his dangerous image. He has blue eyes, which go along perfectly with his straighten hair. He doesn't look too buff, but he is still built and is not someone to mess with. He always wears long trench-coats, which are usually red. He has a scar across his heart, which is a long story behind that one.

Kenji walks like he has no fear of anything, even though he has many privately contracted alchemists after him. He walks with pride, often making people tremble when he passes by. His voice is somewhat creepy, making people cringe. He has a interesting laugh, something that resembles insanity, which is what he is actually known for. If you ever happened to get close enough to look into his eyes, you are a lucky man. His eyes burn a image into your brain letting you know never to do that again.

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PERSONALITY:
→ Kenji is not someone you can trust, he doesn't even trust his own family. The reason being is his brother betrayed his family years ago, and got his own mother killed. That is the main reason he can't trust anyone, anyone could understand that. He is also a very sly person,well more of a spy you could say. He went undercover for his country and started to gather intelligence from Amestris, which was a highly dangerous mission, his own General even told him he was the slickest person he had ever met, which meant a lot to him.

The reason he is so violent is from his childhood, but there is something more to it. He ordered a genocide of foreigners in his country, which he had no known reason for doing so. Hundreds of thousands had died a pointless death, which was unexplained. That is why he deserted the army and became a loner, killing for money. Most of this could most likely be linked to what his brother did, but we may never know.

He is just a type of person who doesn't let people get close to him. He believes that if someone finds a secret, or the way he acts, that would be the downfall of him. He thinks it is a weakness to let others know information about you, which can be true at times. He is just a typical loner, with not many friends because he really just scares them all way, which is not hard to tell. Pushing people away is something he needs to learn how to fix, so he can gain some companions to help him in fights.

He may just have a social disorder, which kind of makes sense. But he would never admit to it, or ever go to the doctor to get some tests done. He's just really socially awkward, which anyone could tell. He also believes having friends is just another bother for him, he gets annoyed easily and he would consider them just another risk.

LOVE:
→
-Wrecking Havoc
-Killing people who think they are stronger
-Showing off his talents to his comrades
-Scarring people for life through his acts
-Making all militaries look like pansies

HATE:
→
-Hates losing fights
-He also hates when he gets injuries, because he believes it makes him look weaker
-When Amestris wins a battle
-General Creedmore, which is a General who whipped him in public due to not following orders
-He really hates other alchemists

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HISTORY:
→ Kenji was born in the town of Kyoto, located in the country of Aerugo. His mother,father, and older brother moved to a small industrial part of the city, trying to earn some more money for their family. They had struggled at first, they were having a hard time adjusting to this new life style. His brother was also becoming very strange, he had started to change for the worse. His brother one day turned on the family, they all assumed it was the pressure of living in this new area. He had murdered his own mother in cold blood, which shocked everyone.

Kenji had finally recovered mentally from this, or at least that is what his dad though. The country of Aerugo started to do tests on younger boys of their country, no one really knew what it was about. They had chosen Kenji as a tester, and was sent off to a secret military facility in a underground base. They eventually discovered he had the ability they were looking for, the ability to transmute. They immediately recruited him into a secret division of the Aerugo army, making him a captain at a young age.

He hadn't seen his father in years, they made Kenji go missing in action. He was pretty powerful and skilled at what he did. He always carried a backpack full of mud with him, so he could easily transmute it. He was proud of what he did, and even the main General thought he was special. They sent him as a spy to Amestris, to gain intelligence that would help in the time of war. The army questioned him at first, but they realized how specialized he was at transmutation, they immediately gave him the rank of Major.

He got in there and got out as quick as he could. But before he got out, he killed hundreds of their military. He slaughtered them, the reason it was so easy, they thought he was still their major. This is when his cold-bloodiness came out, and when he reported back to Aerugo this scared the General of the operations. They tried to put him in jail for crimes against humanity, but he easily escaped the country. He started to roam around, accepting dangerous contracts. Most of them were assassination ones, which started to make him a lot of money.

He then joined a group of looters, which were a group of people who did the things he loved. They killed, and made good money of it too. He made sure they didn't get too close to him, or he would of killed him. They found out there was actually a bounty out for him, so they tried to kill him. One day they knocked him out from behind and carried him to a abandoned building and tied him down. The person who put the bounty on him wanted his head, and actually his heart.

While they thought he was passed out, they attempted to cut open his heart. An old comrade of his from Aerugo was also undercover in this group, and he couldn't let him die like this. He quickly cut off the rope that bonded him to the table, and was immediately killed. Kenji opened his eyes and you could see the anger in his blue eyes. He pulled out his pistol that was hidden in his trench-coat, and started to shoot each of the men attacking him in the head. He quickly got away, but was also shot in the side. He went to go look for a doctor.

The doctor was a privately contracted one, so the military police couldn't find him. He was a smart man, he soon moved back to his home country of Aerugo. After much talks, they accepted him back into the army. He worked in a private division, making a decent payroll.

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ALCHEMIC ABILITY:
→ Kenji's special ability is actually pretty unique. When the bouncing balls activate, the energy from the two elements mixing create a unique effect. The balls gather the energy from the ground and creates rows of long and skinny rock like piercing needles.

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TRIVIA:
→ He was diagnosed to a rare blood disease. The disease is known for sometimes filling the lungs up with traces of blood, which makes the victim cough up small traces at certain times. It is known as a small form of Pulmonary tuberculosis, something deadly. If he goes without medical treatment for too long, he is certain to die.
→ Amestrian ,Aerugese

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ALIAS:
→ Ken

OTHER CHARACTERS:
→ First Character

CREATOR'S COMMENTS:
→ None really

FACE CLAIM:

Code:

[b]Devil May Cry[/b]/[i]Dante[/i]

CUSTOM RANK:
→ Lord Moko

OFFICIAL TITLE:
→ Lord of Havoc

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[Guest]

REVISE

1) Aerugese not Auregese.

2) Once more, Aerugian is not a language. Aerugese is. Also, your languages need colouring.

3) 'Vito Royan' doesn't sound like a typically Aerugese name. Aerugo is the MDA equivalent to the real world's Japan.

4) Face claim coding is screwed up.

5) You don't seem to have made a transmutation equipment app for his alchemy. If you're not underway already, if he's an alchemist, you kinda need to.

6) Being born on the 24th August 1989 would only make him 2011 as MDA functions along a timeline parallel to the real world.

7) 'An unknown illness'? Really? Is wikipedia search that hard? A lot of illnesses can make you cough blood. Radiation sickness, for one. Internal bleeding. Don't be lazy and look for something which could align with this. Helps develop your character more.

Your tenses are a bit skewed with your alchemy. 'Had'? D'you mean to say that he has experienced alchemy but is no longer an alchemist?

9) Coding at the top and with the languages is broken. Don't just put [Red], try putting [*color=red] [*/color] (remove the asterisks).

10) Your history kinda cuts off a little promptly, but I can't complain, as it hits 450 words. If I were you, I'd bring it full circle and up to the modern day, but that's just an opinion.

Alongside a few grammatical errors which you should fix but I'm not going to leave you in Pending limbo for, this app seems like it should be fine if you fix up all the points above.

Welcome to MDA.

[Guest]

Updated

[Guest]

REVISE

1) Kenji Rollan still doesn't sound Aerugese.

2) Once more, Aerugese, not Aurugese.

3) Face claim is STILL screwed up.

4) You've still not specified exactly WHAT disease he has. A rare blood disease that makes you cough blood? There are dozens. And you're diagnosed with something, not diagnosed to it.

Your grammar and application of tenses makes this entire thing slightly difficult to navigate, but other than that, you're almost there.

[Guest]

Fixed all. I just don't understand why Face Claims code is right when in editing mode, but not now. No idea how to fix..

[Guest]

Might wanna change your title from Lord Rollan, now.

[Guest]

Done.

[Reila Tsukino]

REVISE

Hey Ken~ Nice App ^_^ I really like this guy!

1. Date of birth: 1990 would make him 21 >.> I suck at math and only noticed because I was born in 1990... So just fix that. (Most people never notice that... lmao)
2. Name: I am onlllyyy saying this because I am a Japanese major (you don't have to actually change it), butttt Lizumoko isn't Aerugese (Japanese). There is no 'L' though it's pronounced as L in Japanese. Rizumoko would be the proper spelling despite it not existing as a surname anyway. I can recommend other names like... Matsumoto or Yamada and others if need be.
3. Alchemic Ability: This is totally interesting, but it doesn't make sense with alchemy. First of all, alchemy doesn't move things so the balls can't bounce on their own. Secondly, rock/mud/ground doesn't bounce. XD So maybe you should say that with alchemy, you pull up jagged rocks like under where the opponent is standing? Or you could still make balls and chuck them at people like baseballs? What do you think? PM me if you want to discuss it or here works too. =3
4. Trivia: He had lung cancer? Doesn't that mean he's certain to die anyway? He'd lose his hair!! XDDD

[Guest]

Thanks and done

[Reila Tsukino]

APPROVED

We'll work on your alchemy ^_~

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