Finished Character

[Guest]

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CASE FILE: Alchemist

Dont use my darkness..
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FULL NAME:
→ Goken Drakar strife

AGE:
→ 17

SEX:
→ Male

BIRTH PLACE:
→ Central

RACE:
→ Human
DATE OF BIRTH:
→ September 5th

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HEIGHT:
→ 100 (Short XD)

WEIGHT:
→ 29.5

PICTURE:
→

Spoiler:

DESCRIPTION:
→ The eyes are pitch black, With the black area completely red, His hair goes straight down to his legs, And is pitch black, Though with red spikes in the spots around it, His body shape is more curvature at the hips, His skin tone is a very bright pale, With a few cuts near the top of his hand,Dressing with a cloak with spikes at the end, that hangs from his body, Similar to a black gi, He walks with a running movement, Even though he is walking, His voice is similar to-Hollow ichigo, But he has a auto-mail right and left arm

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PERSONALITY:
→ He is always looking around, Trusting no one for the fact that he lost all hope of the things called hope itself, Breaking his chain of thought to the simple fact of 'I want to kill everyone who gets in my way..'. He thinks everything will end in disaster, Because of his common mishaps when he was 8, Broken hearted, Angry, And all those moody types of crap.Though when he can be won, It can change his mind slowly, If anyone were to peek his interest, He would spend life trying to protect it, For the fact that his deepest secret was related to her death. Hes snappy at first, And wont even listen, Unless the dreaded words 'Love' Pop up, It will make him engulfed in rage Simply from his past as always.

He is constantly biting his lips, hoping to see blood spew out, Or thinking heavy suicidal thoughts from his memories, Of missing one person, Simply talking can make him remember the day everything went wrong, And hell go on a rampage Of killing. Only because of the same exact person, He was once happy and cheerful, But that changed when he saw cold blooded death infront of him. That is why he wants death to all people with love, And bringing back to the suicidal thoughts, He loved once, Hes snappy, But cunning for his own wits of the past

LOVE:
→ Ramen,Eating,Playing (Not like fun playing,Pranks) Battling, Blood

HATE:
→ People who wont fight,Bears,Other Alchemist, Snakes, Homunculi

DEEPEST SECRET:
→ That he once loved

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HISTORY:
→When he was born he grew up normally, Reading books and studying the ways of alchemy, always slowly going to a shop, and gathering small bits of the ingredients for the ultimate taboo, His brother was simply gone, Gone from a basic illness, He worked on the mark every night in his room, slowly placing more and more ingredients, Then the night he slammed his hands on it, The electricity flowed, and he looked down at his hands, well arm actually, Everything was gone, and he was bleeding. It took everything without return, Then falling and nearly drowning in the blood itself, Luckily he had one friend who saved him, then pulling him out and beginning to build on a counter to the left, Then waking up with two auto mail arms, He later grew up to practice basic alchemy, Studying more and more about everything he knew, When he turned 13, His friend had to leave central, And head to west city, This made goken tempted even more to learn about alchemy, Because he may be able to use it to help, or such, He led on in his life to the basics of becoming a state alchemist, The day before he was going to try human transmutation again, He was volunteered to be a state alchemist. He took the offer and began working even more on training himself. When he turned 14 he developed feelings for a woman, But she moved to east city right after, Goken went to west city to check on his friend. To learn he was one of the best auto mail makers there. (Im sorry, I dont know were to go from here)

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ALCHEMIC/ALKAHESTRIC ABILITY:
→

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TRIVIA:
→ Anything else you want to add? Random trivia, information on an illness or disability your character has, etc.
→ IshbalanAERUGESECRETAN


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ALIAS:
→ Goken Strife

OTHER CHARACTERS:
→ First character

CREATOR'S COMMENTS:
→ Do you have anything to say yourself? As long as it doesn't sound stupid, you can put anything in here really. Just no autobiographies about your last journey to the toilet, please, because seriously, NO ONE CARES.

FACE CLAIM:

CUSTOM RANK:
→ Insert the customized rank name that you wish for your character here. It can be anything within reason. If you are claiming a canon character (like Head of Central Head Quarters for example) usually 'Head of Central HQ' would be your custom rank. This would replace where is says: 'Pending.'

OFFICIAL TITLE:
→ Creation alchemist

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[Reila Tsukino]

Just so you know, your archive date is September 5th! ^_^

[Guest]

Thank you!, (So thats when i was born??)

[Guest]

No, thats just so you know how long till this app will get archived due to being unfinished. ^_^ Your characters birthdate is something you come up! If you want it to be September 5th though, go ahead.

[Guest]

Added B-day

[Guest]

{REVISE}

I'm going to be frank here, and I'm not trying to be mean, but this needs to be fixed up a lot. ><;;

1. His race would be Amestrian
   
2. Description is 47 words short. Detail is a wonderful thing, and can really bring your character to life, especially if you feel like the picture you're using as his Face Claim doesn't feel sufficient enough.
   
3. Personality is 66 words short. Again, detail is a wonderful thing. Listing off traits is nice? But not very fulfilling, nor does it paint a very good picture of him. Also, we are trying to lighten up on the doom and gloom that can be a trend amongst characters.
   
4. History.... Ok, this is the biggest problem here. On MDA, we like to try to keep things slightly realistic. Right now, your history is 170 words short of the minimum requirement. However, you have human transmutation in there. Get rid of it. In order for us to even consider a history that includes human transmutation, it must be AT LEAST 2,000 words long. Or so. Also, the minimum age requirement for a State Alchemist is 17. This also means in your history. For him to be admitted at 14 is highly unlikely. My advice? Rewrite it. I know that sounds harsh, but in the end it might help.
   
5. You must have something typed into the description of your alchemical ability. It must be at least a paragraph please!
   
6. You can't use Wrath as your FC, we don't allow using FMA characters for face claims on here.

[Guest]

Yeah, I kinda got off track and forgot my word tings XD (It was annoying, Having to leave and stuff,) Just leave this inactive,

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