Kazuma Sora

[Guest]

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CASE FILE: Alchemist

A frog in a pond.. does not know what the ocean is!!
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FULL NAME:
→ Kazuma Sora

AGE:
→ 16

SEX:
→ Male

BIRTH PLACE:
→ Aomori, Aerugo

RACE:
→ Aerugese

DATE OF BIRTH:
→ August 16th, 1995

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HEIGHT:
→ 178 cm
WEIGHT:
→ 58 kg

PICTURE:
→

Spoiler:

DESCRIPTION:
→ Sora is a rather tall guy, with blue hair and brown eyes. His hair is rather smooth, and always have them down in all sides. He has a small portion of hair falling down on his forehead. He is thin and rather weak-looking, which is not exactly the truth. He has a peach, fair skin. He wears loose, monk-like clothing. His top clothing is white, except it has dark blue sleeves and covers a part of the chest. His long sleeves made it hard to see his arms unless he is fighting. He wears long, white and loose pants. The dark blue addition of the shirt extended down to his shins. As a belt, he has strapped white bandages around his waist.

Sora is almost never runs in the morning, unless attacked. He is the cat-like person who sleeps in the day and runs in the night. He usually sleeps around the time the sun rises and wakes up by time it goes down. Sora usually walks yawning in the morning, and runs hyper-active in the night. He has a high voice, which drops down suddenly at times. He has a habit of abusing 'and's and 'but's when he speaks.

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PERSONALITY:
→ He is a rather mysterious person to other people, since he keeps his opinions and decisions to himself. He speaks only when spoken to, or of course, attacked. He is actually a way different person once you get to know him, but for now, he remains mysterious. His actual personality differs from the time of the day. In mornings, he is usually asleep, and if woken up, lazy and careless. He hates to be woken up, since he is the cat type, sleeping in the day and up in the night. In afternoons, he is usually asleep, too. In evenings, by the time the sun ges down, he wakes up, and is hyper-active. So basically, in mornings, he is lazy and careless and annoying. In nights, he is hyper-active, insane, reckless, and well, annoying.

Sora has many dreams everyday, and since he sleeps a lot, he even trains in his dreams! He usually realises that he is dreaming when he sees himself in a morning. Thats when he starts training, using the lucid dreaming techniques to summon rocks around him. He usually realises one dream out of his regular 5, since the rest are night-based and convincing. Since he dreams a lot, it is hard for him to remember anything. So because of that, he is also a very forgetful person. He forgets to eat most of the time, and realise he had not eaten whenn he hears his stomach roaring.

Sora enjoys the view of the moon as he trains, and likes the harsh winds blowing. Yes, in nights, he usually trains by slashing down bits of rocks in any where he sees. He enjoys nature too, so his favorite training spot is the forest. Also, he has another talent, its a unique talent that attracts animals, animals just like him. He also has a habit of keeping some animals for a while and letting them go again.



LOVE:
→ Nature [Forests], Animals, Moon, Gazing at stars, The Wind, His claw.

HATE:
→ Explosions, Destruction, Militaries, Guns, Amestrians.

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HISTORY:
→ Sora was born in a small house up a hill and surrounded by a forest. Their ancestors settled down inside the forest many years ago, and they ended up in a small house just next to the forest. The family was not very poor, nor were they any rich, they were just happy with what they got. Sora was named so, after the beautiful sky that covered them that morning. He was raised and cared for greatly, getting care from his mother, and his father as well. His mother was a simple woman who lived a happy life caring for her son and cooking for the family. His father, was an alchemist, a very skilled one, working to just amuse himself. When Sora was very young in age, his father suggested teaching him alchemy, he convinced mother in a small while, and so they began.

Sora showed great interest in alchemy, usually trying out what his father taught him, outside at the forest. His father showed him the basics of alchemy when he was just 4 years old. As Sora grew, he began to grow more and more into alchemy. Alongside that, he loved visiting the forest, so he used the alchemy to impress the animals around him, the animals liked him, he had a unique talent besides his alchemy. When Sora was 10 years old, his father taught him more and more, reaching out to novice alchemy. Sora still, impressed, went on with his studies. He soon began performing alchemy to find medicines to help injured animals. He used alchemy to help the forest grow.

One day, when he was 11 years old, Amestrian soldiers on war, broke into the forest with their unknown enemies! Soon, they heard guns and explosions, and in just 3 hours, the forest was destroyed, and many animals killed! Sora, in tears after his beloved forest destroyed right in front of his eyes, developed a hate for Amestrians.
His father encouraged him to continue learning alchemy, and one day find a way to revive forests like these. Sora agreed. By the time Sora was 13, he was helping his father with the alchemy of that level. Sora decided to take up a speciality next. He went for wind alchemy, as he remembered the gentle breeze of the forest he loved so much. He began using the wind alchemy in various ways to help him. He would use basic wind alchemy to guard him by forming a twister/tornado around him. He would use it to raise water around to attack flame alchemists. He would use sand as an advantage, to create dust and attack. Along with his new speciality, he began getting a new habit, of sleeping in the day and up in the night, due to the wind cycle. His father was impressed by this cause, and studied it, he said it was of his free will.

3 more years later, Sora was now correcting his father at alchemy! He was now a very talented child, he was more skilled in using the wind alchemy than ever before, and he was now used to his transmuted weapon, which he wears all the time now. He decided to set out on a journey, to learn more about alchemy, and to find ways, to revive animals and forests. Till now, he always kept his anger to Amestrians, he once even attacked Amestris, a minor one, attacking two citizens, and one alchemist, soon chased away by a military agent. How will he ever forget what happened back that day?

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ALCHEMIC/ALKAHESTRIC ABILITY:
→ Sora uses his wind alchemy to make a vacuum around his elbow to hands and knee to feet. He also applies it on his weapon, 3-Claws. He does this to reduce air resistance, which allows him to move very fast. The alchemy circle for this technique, is drawn on the back of his palm. So basically, his ability is to create vacuums around his body to help him movee faster. This ability is great when combined with his weapon, since speed give a great advantage while using the sharp weapon. As he becomes more powerful, it may be possible he can some day be able to create vacuums freely, allowing him to do many things.


His alchemy circle is drawn on his weapon, 3-Claws.

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TRIVIA:

→ Sora speaks Aurugese, knowing a little Cretarian.

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ALIAS:
→ Sora

OTHER CHARACTERS:
→ First Character

CREATOR'S COMMENTS:
→ No comment.

FACE CLAIM:

Code:

[b]Naruto: Shippuden/[I don't know] [Hayato Date is the director of the series :/][/b]/[i]Sora[/i]

CUSTOM RANK:
→ The Wanderer

OFFICIAL TITLE:
→ Night-wind Sora (Yoru-fū sora 夜風空)

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[Aurelius Schwartz]

REVISE

First, welcome to MDA! Your character seems really interesting!

1. I would be more wary of grammar. Use spell check!
2. Personality: Your middle paragraph doesn't really seem to be about his personality, but more about his alchemy. Also, I find even that confusing. What do you mean by draw alchemic circles in the air? That's impossible. Yes, you can use wind, but the circle would have to be like on his claw or something like you mention at the end of the paragraph. I'm guessing that that was just figurative speech.
You need to take out that middle paragraph and move it into your alchemic ability or make it more about his personality.
3. History: It's great, but the end about his alchemic ability needs to be revised. He can't really 'discover' his special ability like in naruto, it's more like he choses what he wants it to be. Science starts with a hypothesis, not with discovery. See below for more details.
4. Alchemic ability: You have a lot of different alchemic abilities listed there. You need to focus on one thing. Transmutation circles must be on a solid object, be it tattooed to his hand or on his claw. He can't draw them in the air and expect it to work. Also wind cannot 'become a hand'... We need to figure out a plausible way to get what you want. But first, I need to know exactly what you want your ability to be specifically. Since alchemy is based on real-life occurrences, you need to think logically 'how could this work?'
5. Trivia: How do you 'call' animals? If they're wild, it's impossible. Also, Japanese is called Aerugese and English is called Cretan. And you need to give them colors. Use this for reference: https://mdalchemist.rpg-board.net/t435-5-languages-and-dialogue
6. Birthplace: Takayama was destroyed by an earthquake and a disease around the time when you say the Amestrians invaded. It doesn't exactly work with the timeline. Maybe use Aomori? There are tons of forests there. (The name itself means 'blue forest') ^_^

All in all, this has potential to become awesome! Just fix those few things.

Oh yeah, and your username needs to be the same as your character's name. So make it Sore or Kazuma or Sora Kazuma. Either works. You just change it under your profile!

[Guest]

1: I think the grammars fine now teehee
2: Changed ability to just controlling the wind. Moved and replaced.
3: Done
4: Just controlling the wind, edited, done.
5: Removed the ability to call animals, but if you dont mind, animals just like him.
6: Aomori it is

So i think its done done done :3
Except i'll have to edit Sora's transmtation circles thread.

[Aurelius Schwartz]

APPROVED

Nice work! ^_^

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