Joseph (Joey) Goldstein

[Guest]

Full Name:
Joseph Goldstein

State Name:
It will be the ‘Light Alchemist’

Age:
13

Gender:
Male

Race:
Human

Nationality:
Amestrian

Appearance
Joey stands 4 foot 11 inch tall, He is 108 pounds. He is a pale. He has short spiky brown hair to his ears. He wears loose black jeans, a silver belt, and a black T shirt. Over the shirt he wears an open large black flannel coat (no hood). Finally, he wears black sneakers.
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Height:
5'6"

Weight:
108 lbs

Eye Color:
Electric Blue

Hair Color:
Brown

Any other stuff

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Weapon of choice:
iron spear (about 5’ 5”) or double daggers

Other equipment:
NONE

Transportation:
Walking

Family:
his mother is dead
his brother died

History:
At the age of 5 he was found in the streets by an army officer who took him in. He is fitted with “auto-mail” on his right arm. He had to under go this surgery because he attempted human transmutation to resurrect his friend who lived on the streets with him but put in the wrong rune and not enough blood. When the ritual went out of control he paid his right arm ass a toll for seeing “the truth”. He is filled with deep regret and sorrow for his stupidity in messing up the transmution circle. In his young ages he studied alchemy. The army had paid for his surgery and it was the worst pain he had ever felt in his life. He does not know how to make a transmution circle when performing alchemy this is because at the age of 10 he suffered a concussion and amnesia because he had been beaten severely by a group of gang members walking home from the store at night. So a well known alchemist in his town called the “Time Alchemist” re-taught him how to perform alchemy but did not teach him how do perform it using a transmution circle. Now he tries his best to become a state alchemist to get information on ho to resurrect his friend.

Special skills:
Transmution without transmution circle.

[Guest]

REVISE

Welcome to the site~! I'm afraid to say that there are a LARGE amount of problems with this application. Well, the entire application IS a problem. So I'll be brief.

• If I'm not mistaken, is this profile template from MDA V1? If it is, it's the wrong template. We are now using THIS template for our applications, and you are to choose the one titled 'Alchemists/Alkahestrists', unless you don't want to make one anymore. Then you have a few other areas to choose from.
  
• Secondly, this RP is based ONE HUNDRED years into the future. Which means that Ed and Al? They're dead. And you're not allowed to be related to them. You can have them as Idols, but you can't have them as relatives.
  
• You're allowed Alchemy without Transmutation Circles. But you have to make a flawless application, with double the required word counts. That means 300 Description, 600 Personality and 900 History. It's a difficult thing to do, so I personally wouldn't recommend it. There's only ever been one high-level enough app for that.
  
• I can't really see anything else to go on - SIMPLY because this app is so wrong on it's own. My advice - post a reply to this thread with a NEW app, and make that one. I'll go from there. Thank you.
  

And that is all from me...

Ciao~

[Aurelius Schwartz]

Got your e-mail. XD Dai got to it first.

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