Lacrimose, Nib (WIP)

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CASE FILE: Non-Militant Alchemist




"In the shadow of what's real,
dig a hole down in the sand.
where you know you left it all,
the things that make you understand."
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FULL NAME: Nib Lacrimose



AGE:23




SEX: Male




BIRTHPLACE: Southern shores of Aeruego, Port Sangyn.



RACE: Aerugese




DATE OF BIRTH:October of 1988

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HEIGHT:6 ft 1

WEIGHT:156 lb


PICTURE: https://i.servimg.com/u/f41/17/61/00/74/asuma_12.jpg (Not my picture, but y'know... just for imagery!)

DESCRIPTION: Nib is a sleuth individual. He's often slumped and mulling over any observations gathered. His hair is black and slick. Nib is often under dressed or sporting a thin layer of cloth. The odd individual frequently dismisses formalities. Notable transmutation circles can be seen on both of his inner ankles.... these are exposed from his lack of footwear other than a wrap of cloth around the arch of his feet. His skin is a light golden coloration with an otherwise pale complexion. The hair on his mug will get scruffy without being groomed for days on end. Coworkers and acquaintances alike question whether his state of mind is altered. The man is a litter bug with little regaurd for trash. He flicks his cigarette butts into flower pots and in the streets all the same. His eyes are a deep brown with golden flecks that stand out from the muck.

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PERSONALITY:

Nib can be a loud and boisterous fellow or silent and contemplative. It's easy for him to flip his phases. He's a half and half kinda guy. The glass is simply at the half mark. His hunched over posture says a lot about his sloppyness. All the while he is still quick witted and can have a sharp tongue. His mental state is full of absurdities. He is incapable of most relationships with most people as they can't tolerate him at all times of the day. He will stare at something for hours on end simply "admiring" its qualities. When he's been feeling down he can get rough and become somewhat of a bully. It's best to give him pity even if it is feigned.
At times he is somewhat of an emotional retard. His thoughts never seem to match his facial expressions. With his good balance of wits he is left indecisive half the time. Few might say he's goofy. Others could swear he is simply mad. His acquisition is to obtain possessions/wealth. He will spend time wishing to bring all things into harmony and equilibrium. Favors change for a greater good, disdains bureaucratic organizations that get in the way of social improvement, and places a high value on personal freedom, not only for oneself, but for others as well. May create conflict in a team if he feels he is being pushed around, and often view extensive organization and planning as pointless, preferring to improvise.
Some might disagree with his barefooted, unconventional, and eccentric tendencies. He simply assures himself that his methods are custimary to his lifestyle. The wanderer has spent many of days sulking over his inablity to whistle. This makes him feel inferior to others at times.... The subject of whistling can be a grim one for this man.


LOVE:

The smell of smoke, gasoline, burning wood and dirt. Other inquirious minds. Dead trees, falling leaves and autumn. Mushrooms and pepper. Dogs. Flirting.
HATE:
Opposing personalities... e.g. Someone neat, punctual or crutchless. Doesn't like shoes or even being indoors for too long. Bright lights and obnoxious bright colors screw with his sensory. Nib hates tomatoes.

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HISTORY:
Nib was born and raised on a small farm where his father taught him how to mine and clear trees so that they could build items for other people to use. The Port of Sangyn had a busseling market where he made out well as a merchant selling raw and sometimes transmuted materials. His father was a respected engineer for the fleets of Aruegal's military before retiring to raise his only son and be with his wife. At the age of 20 he set out on his own to venture the wilds. His travels have certainly strayed him from monotonous labor in his hometown. A sort of vigilanti slash detective aspect has led him to many skirmishes with your average riff raff and mobster types. He isn't below using alchemy to settle things between his enemies. The nature of his techniques are a manipulation of Iron Oxide and moisture. Alchemically, he is able to tranform fresh metals into anything from jagged scraps to dust. Withering and detirioration are the properties of this school of alchemy. With the tattoos on his ankles; he is able to transmute by stomping on the ground, kicking, or even just a touch from the bottom of his feet.
The young drifter relishes the time when the sun goes down and it's just him and the stars in the sky that keep him company. He leads the life of a loner with a sometimes aimless sense of direction. Newspaper headlines of the war are all Nib has to go on as far as any sources of information go. His instincts are sharp and valuable in aiding his conquest to unlock the dirty secrets of the countries and there various gangs, troops, clans and organisations. Hopefully this would bring the world close through his aspirations. His intentions are far more selfish despite his altruism. He's giddy for gold and the attention of the public. Leaders despise his ability to rally the people into a roaring, shouting, cheering crowd of onlookers.
Despite his family ties to the military of Aruegal; Nib prefers to denounce such relationships. This way, he's more roaming friendly to the other nations. He has identification that acts somewhat like a Passport. The traveler tends to remain aloof, however. Nib has a tendency to spoil his income on booze and food. He eats ravenously and rarely sits down to eat, preferring to keep his pace. He's also an amatuer chef. It is advised not to eat his mushroom soup. It's likely for an average person to black out.
Despite being such an eccentric bum; Nib easily makes plenty of invaluable bonds with others. He's always been known to first get to know the local innkeepers and try out the local cuisines. Bath houses are his favorite place to take a rest. Relaxing or not, he is dedicated to chatting up and many times even hitting on strangers. The more people he talks to the more he can get to know about what is ahead and where he should get moving. In the past, all of his destinations have been on the sayings and advice of other travelers and town folk.

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TRIVIA:

Nib's native language is Aerueguese, but speaks a few others. Amestrian, Cretian, and Xingese.

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ALIAS:
Nib

OTHER CHARACTERS:
This is numero uno.

Gamefreakq is the artist for the picture used in this profile. Credit goes out to his awesome style.


OFFICIAL TITLE:
The Atrophic Alchemist

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{REVISE}

- Correct the codes in your application given how it is using "courier" font where it should only apply to "title:" type of words in the application if you get my gist. It shouldn't be in the description.

- Above in the header where it has the semi "fleur-de-lais", you should've put whether he was a military-alchemist or a civilian one. Deleting it makes your application unassessable and it is a requirement too!

- Personality needs to be at least two paragraphs minimum, and 300 words. Your application falls short of that, and needs to be lengthened as a result.

- History should at least be 500 words, it falls short of that as well. Use a word count to check the amount.

- Also, use the template than deleting random sections, trivia is required to see what languages you speak, and put in small tidbits of information not covered in your history.

Once you take care of these small farts, I'll give a more thorough evaluation of your application. Happy editing.

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I apologize for the flatulence. I think everything is up to par with what you listed. Let me know if it needs more revamping!

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{REVISE}

- Correct coding is required and all for those words you pasted from the template like "Case File: Non-Military Alchemist". Best paste directly from the templates.

- Correct spelling for "Aerueguese" is Aerugese, and "Cretian" is Cretan. Your signature got that right though. History has the word "Arugal" rather than Aerugese, best fix those typos and you'd be better off.

- Trivia should have specific colors for the languages rather than the whole section, sort of like my signature, that's the color text my character uses for example to speak those tongues as you can see.

- ID cards can't act as passports when traveling into other countries, especially when there is often a war of some sort going on. Best probably pass through customs or go through the borders. Despite having denounced relationships with the military, your character would still be a citizen of Aerugo, and Aerugo still hasn't made a peace treaty with Amestris after the war, and is in a state of war with Xing in particular.

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Archive date is the 8th.

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