Kaien Shiba WIP

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CASE FILE: Alchemist(Non Millitary)

"All Is One And One Is All"
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FULL NAME:
→ Kyoraku Asakura

AGE:
→ Your age.16

SEX:
→ Male

BIRTH PLACE:
→ Amestris

RACE:
→ Ameterian

DATE OF BIRTH:
→ October-30

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HEIGHT:
→ 175
WEIGHT:
→ 142 lbs

PICTURE:
→

Spoiler:

DESCRIPTION:
→ Kyo stands 5'9 in hieght and he has white that is black at the tips of it, it goes down a little past his neck and on the front it goes over his right eye, and he keeps the rest behind his left ear. He wears a white jacket that goes upto his neck. He wears black pants and shoes. He always will have a smile on face weitherit be rain or shine, there isnt time when he isnt smiling, unless its death. He sometimes wears glasses when he wants to look "Cool" or when he cant see something, ven though he has great vision. He wears a black shirt under his jacket, but he would normally take off his jacket when he gets into a seriouse fight. He would keep it on if he knew that he didnt have to get to seriouse. He would sometime changes his look completly wwhen he gets tired of the one has currently.

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PERSONALITY:
→ He is cheerful and shows greater concern for his team-mates and friends, placing their safety over the successful completion of a mission, as well as believing that teamwork is essential to overall success as a team. He is also regularly late for appointments, making obvious excuses. This is because of his frequent visits to the memorial where his brother's name is engraved, where he loses track of time. However, Kaien is carefree and emotionless, often speaking bluntly about sensitive topics.

Kyo claims to have lost everyone who was close to him, causing some reluctance to allow others to get close to him. Kyo has a rather solitary and matter-of-fact attitude. His calm and detached demeanour has been called “cool, hip, and trendy” many times by the few close friends he have. He also is the type who will kill when ever he gets in the mood to do so. He spends some days in the rain thinking about how he could of had prevented alot of his mistakes from happining, but he tries not to spend to much time thinking about bad memories.

He is very Stubborn, trying to force a different opinion, or to make him change his mind is like cutting down a redwood with a fish. Once an idea has set in his mind, there is no going back, he will keep trying to do it or say it, no matter what advice is given against. He is also very Understanding. He isn’t an idiot, though he isn’t a genius either. However one thing that is good about him is his ability to listen and quickly grasp a situation or what someone is struggling to say.

He is Honourable-ish. Though he isn’t an arrogant man, he has his honour and as such will hold up his ends of agreements. Even if it means betting his life away to a darkness, going against that agreement is not the man that is Kyo. Though his honour code does change quite often he can writhe himself from certain responsibilities.

LOVE:
→Rain, Clouds, Books, Sake, Women

HATE:
→Sun, SKy, Magazines, Getting to Drunk, Roaches

DEEPEST SECRET:
→ He isnt a big fan of spiders

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HISTORY:
→ Kyo was born October 30, he was born into a family that has alway served the military through their alchemy abilities. Kyo had an older brother who he really didnt know because of how young he was when he left out on his own .From early childhood, he displayed a proficiency for alchemy, acquiring self-taught alchemy skills and comprehension from the advanced literature in his father's abandoned study at an age that shocked even his mother. Having incorporated alchemy into his life during his developmental stages, he was a very profeicent alchemist. Once Kyo was done with his father abadon study he asked him for more books to read about alchemy and to learn more from it. He knew he couldnt become a great alchemist all alone, he knew that he would need some kind of help in the some area.

His father smiled apon the factt that his son would also be taking a great liking to alchemy just like he did when he was a young. After a while of proving that he knew the basics and some advance things about alchemy, Kaien father agreed to help him in his learning. Kyo and his father went away on a trip to help Kyo really learn how to be a better alchemist. Before Kyo was taught anything his father first started to give him martial arts training, and stat giving him hard puzzels to figue out.

Kyo's father belive that "To Train The Soul One Must Train The Mind And Body First". Kyo spent the whole year doing things that trained his mind and his body. His father kept him so much focus on that Kyo didnt even think about the alchemy training untill after everything was over with. Kyo and his father spent more than a year on the island, they had spent a total of four years on the island, whihc cause them both to come back in top condition from all the training they both had done over that long period of time.

As Soon Kyo and his father had returned his parents wasted no time having another kid. With One Year time they had another child, who was a boy. Kyo was happy that they had another Kid now it was three of them instead of two. Kyo and his brother would care for the baby untill one day that they were out there was a big fire in a store. Kyo and his two brothers and their parents were in the store. Kyo and his eldest brother was the only ones who made it out. That day scared Kyo but after a month he got over it and decided to move on with his life. He plannd on joining the military after he get stronger.

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ALCHEMIC/ALKAHESTRIC ABILITY:
→ Kaien special ability is Earth Achemy, he is ably to minupulate the ground that is under him and anything that would have anything that would have any type of earth material inside of it. Its the geokinetic ability to manipulate earth and rock, in all its various forms.

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TRIVIA:
→ He is fluent in most langauges
→ He favorite color is Baby Blue

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ALIAS:
→ Dawn

OTHER CHARACTERS:
→N/A

CREATOR'S COMMENTS:
→ I want Cookies nd Cream Ice cream

CUSTOM RANK:
→Cool Guy

OFFICIAL TITLE:
→ Terraforming alchemist

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R E V I S E

Well, you can be the first person to experience my new style of replying to applications. And so, let us begin.

AGE:
→ Your age.16

While the age is generally approve-worthy, but it's rare for an Alchemist to be 16-years old. I'll let it slide, but you might want to work on changing it if you want it to be more plausible.

WEIGHT:
→ 10 stones

Ten Stone is 63 kg. Just so you know. =3

Description needs to be a minimum of 150 words. Also, please use better language - "da" and language like that... sorry, it's not really acceptable here.

Your Personality is required to be a minimum of 300 words.

ALCHEMIC/ALKAHESTRIC ABILITY:
→ Kaien special ability is Earth Achemy, he is ably to minupulate the ground that is under him and anything that would have anything that would have any type of earth material inside of it. Its the geokinetic ability to manipulate earth and rock, in all its various forms.

Please expand on this - I don't see much detail.

In your trivia, please specify the languages that he speaks and colors of said languages.

CUSTOM RANK:
→ N/A

You need one of these. =3 It's just a witty word or two to do with your character.

Finally - the name. I'm sorry, but you can't use that name. It's the name of a character from the Bleach Anime, though I'll assume that you already knew that. Other than that, just fix up your spelling and grammar, and this app should work just fine! ^_^

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Fixed

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R E V I S E

Very nice! You've done almost everything I asked, save for these two things:

• You still need to specify colors for when your character speaks a different language - i.e: "Fluent in Amestrian and Ishvallan", that sort of thing.
  
• I asked you to expand on your Alchemic Ability. Please do this.

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